little sad Nebtho thing

[dragongirl810]

 hey so this is my first time posting on here and I'm not even sure if I've done it right, (second attempt, did it wrong the first time) 

I don't even know what this is but here you go, have this thing I wrote

bold= Pause p.o.v
italics= Etho p.o.v

 

I lie in bed at night  awake, just thinking of you

I'm worried about him, he hardly sleeps any more.

I hear your voice, your breath against my ear

he never leaves that house of his

and I still can't believe , I just can't accept,

I've tried to visit but his door is always locked

you said you'd never leave me and it's true,

the last time I knock on his door, all I heard was him curse from inside,

because I can never think of anything but you

and tell me to leave him be

I tell myself it's stupid, you're never coming back

I mean, Etho, swearing! there has to be something wrong

but I'm too scared, to scared to see you again.

well.. I know what's wrong but he's taking it worse than I would have thought

I've come so close, but my fears keep me away,

I've tried telling him that Nebris wouldn't have wanted this..

and as I remember, all the times we shared,

but he breaks down crying at the mention of his name

the pain is just to much, life seems scarier than death,

I decide to check on him, if he won't let me in, I'll break down the door.

you were my all, my everything, my reason to live,

but by the time I got there...

and now, my reason to die.

I was too late.

Comments

[fireredlily]

You succeeded in posting, now please be sure to put the poem under a cut! :D

You can do that by one of two ways:
- In HTML edit mode, you can put < cut> and </ cut> around your poem, without the spaces inside the < and > signs.
- In Rich Editing mode, you can select your text and then hit the Cut button (the icon with text bars and a squiggly line under it).

[dragongirl810]

thanks so much, i was just looking for how to do that

[chemrepnacl]

Haha nebtho? That's Nebris/Etho. This is Pause/Etho, I don't think they have a ship name.

[dragongirl810]

umm, it's meant to be etho mourning nebris with pause being a concerned friend , sorry if it's confusing

[chemrepnacl]

Ah, I apologise.

[dragongirl810]

no it's my fault for not making this clearer (this was just something that popped into my head and it isn't very well edited)

oh and p.s, they should have a ship name, it needs to happen

[gummy53]

PauseUnLab?
EthoUnPause?
Pausetho?
:)

[dragongirl810]

XD

I like pausetho

[dragongirl810]

I realize I may have confidence issues when I want to hide in a hole after posting this

[giggleworthy]

No, don't hide! This is good!

[dragongirl810]

thanks, hopefully I'll get round to writing a proper fic soon :)

[drippingneon]

<3 It's really good :D

[dragongirl810]

thanks <3

[drippingneon]

Your Welcome :D

[tdscott8]

My first fic < This poem

Honestly I really like this, it's interesting and the writing style is something I haven't seen done before. Nice job!

[dragongirl810]

thank you :)
this isn't my first fic tho, I had an old story on DA but I lost interest in the fandom.
glad you like it, I'm working on a proper fic now