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mindcrackloveHi! I have been lurking around for two months, and I (finally) got enough courage to post something. I'm sorry if I misspelled, or did something wrong.
Oops.
Aurey
A girl with flaming red hair and a white dress (me) was sitting at her desk waiting for a man with black hair and green goggles to appear at my window. He had appeared at my window the last 3 nights and told me of a land of people like him, fighting monsters at night. He had said there are only men there now, no woman had dared to join. I had no clue what his name was, and if this land was real, or not. I groaned. Then I heard a soft knocking noise and I looked up, ran over to the window and let him in.
“Hi.” the black haired, green goggled, man said.
“Hi, to you too.” I whispered. He grinned.
“I guess I should tell you my name now.” he whispered back.
“Yep, now would be a good time” I replied.
“My name is Vechs.”
“Interesting name.”
“What’s your name?”
“Promise you won’t laugh.”
“I won’t”
“Aureylain” I sighed.
“Why would I laugh?” he questioned.
“Because he did.”
Yay, I added a cut!
Oops.
Aurey
A girl with flaming red hair and a white dress (me) was sitting at her desk waiting for a man with black hair and green goggles to appear at my window. He had appeared at my window the last 3 nights and told me of a land of people like him, fighting monsters at night. He had said there are only men there now, no woman had dared to join. I had no clue what his name was, and if this land was real, or not. I groaned. Then I heard a soft knocking noise and I looked up, ran over to the window and let him in.
“Hi.” the black haired, green goggled, man said.
“Hi, to you too.” I whispered. He grinned.
“I guess I should tell you my name now.” he whispered back.
“Yep, now would be a good time” I replied.
“My name is Vechs.”
“Interesting name.”
“What’s your name?”
“Promise you won’t laugh.”
“I won’t”
“Aureylain” I sighed.
“Why would I laugh?” he questioned.
“Because he did.”
Yay, I added a cut!
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Date: Wednesday, September 17th, 2014 12:46 am (UTC)I really like the fic so far, if I were to give you advice it would be to stay in the same perspective.
Like you started in third person, but changed to first.
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Date: Wednesday, September 17th, 2014 02:03 am (UTC)Yuuuum, Cookies...
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Date: Thursday, September 18th, 2014 12:29 am (UTC)Cuts are,
< cut > To start them,
< /cut > To end them.
No spaces, course.
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Date: Friday, September 26th, 2014 01:02 am (UTC)