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I was building, and this just popped into my head. It may be terrible, but it is my first fic! Feel free to tell me what I did wrong so I can fix it! Hope you enjoy!

Aurey ran as fast as she could through the night, knowing there was not much time left.

She stopped, out of breath, and looked around desperately for a place to hide herself. After looking all around her, she thought she heard something behind her, so she leapt and hid behind a rosebush. She figured the red in her hair would (hopefully) blend in with the roses so she wouldn't be too obvious.

Her heart started racing as she heard footsteps, and despite her nervousness causing her to tremble, she tried to remain completely still. Then, she glanced up, and about 6 feet away from her was her pursuer. She watched as the tall, lanky mapmaker searched the area, trying to find her. He probably knew she was close, and as Aurey was trying to concentrate and not move, she felt a sneeze coming on.

Panicking, she tried to find a way to muffle the noise, for if he heard her, she knew she would be eliminated immediately. She sneezed whilst holding her nose, and to her luck, it made little noise. She sighed to herself in relief, and Vechs seemed to give up on this area and move on.

She watched him walk away until she couldn't see him any more, and relaxed a little. She contemplated whether she should try to find somewhere else to hide, but decided against in just in case he was still in the area.

After a few minutes of waiting, she stiffened up as she heard rustling behind her. She didn't dare look because she didn't want to cause any movement. "OhIhopethatisn'thimpleasedon'tlethimseemeohgoshno," she thought when suddenly she saw a shadow right on top of her and the rose bush was moved over to see a grinning man looking down on her with green goggles, and though she couldn't see his eyes, she knew they had an evil look in them. "I found you Rel Rel..." he said as he grabbed her.

=x=

"That was really fun," said Vechs as he and Aureylian walked from the B-Team bakery, each holding a cake. "Yeah, we should totally play Hide 'n Seek around spawn more often!" Aurey agreed as they walked back to her base to build yet another rainbow thing on the MindCrack server. 

So that was my first attempt at fan-fiction, hopefully I got the cut right, and it wasn't too terrible! (Oh and this takes place on the season 4 server in case anyone was wondering.) </cut>
 

Date: Monday, July 28th, 2014 11:31 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] kappa77
Not bad for a first fic :D

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 12:48 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Pretty good.

-Eclipse

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 01:45 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] clashofdemonesense
Oh. Fun!

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 01:46 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] freezer7
Awwwww, that's really good!

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 03:08 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] freezer7
Of course! :)

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 03:47 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] thezombineer
Well... I didn't see that coming :)

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 07:18 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] r7
Great job for a first fic. Kinda saw the The-search-is-more-innocent-than-it-seems coming, but well done.

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 06:17 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] r7
No problem!

Date: Tuesday, July 29th, 2014 08:45 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] its_catbug
I've read through this a few times and each time the smile on my face gets bigger :) great job!

Date: Wednesday, July 30th, 2014 09:25 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] teamcanadagirl
Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! <3

Date: Wednesday, July 30th, 2014 08:54 pm (UTC)
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Awesome, have a cookie :P

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