The Demon Within Prologue

[rosabella]

This story was originally made by after I'll Make Your Blood Boil and put it on the back burner

Nebris went to make the Bound Blade, but what he didn't know is that there was a 15 percent chance of a demon possess him, after doing so. The demon can only stay for a short period of time, sometimes only a quarter amount of time, if not immediately snapped back.

What do you think?
 

Comments

[freezer7]

Ooooooo, I can't wait for more!

[gaminggirl]

Sounds exciting. Can't wait :D

[theropod]

Hate to say it but that sounds more like someone posting a prompt post that a story, even for a prologue. Its more of an idea than actually a fic. You should probably be aiming for at least 500 words of a story before you post it, at least in my opinion.

Its a good idea, don't get me wrong, you can have fun with it, but two sentences doesn't make a story.

[rosabella]

I'm not really good with stories, so it might not be very good at first, but I'll try to get better. ^.^

[theropod]

Looking to improve yourself is always a good thing. I really like the idea that you've got, you just need to try and go for some length :3 I'm sure you can pull it off. And it never hurts to practice either, every little helps! Every big author out there, from JK Rowling to JRR Tolkien started off a someone with no skill in writing. They all had to start somewhere, just like us :3

[oliviathecf]

interesting. seems more like a prompt then a story, perhaps you should develop it more.

but im interested :~)