The first chapter of... Something possibly great but probably not.

[tsugrad]

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Comments

[redyellowgirl]

I love it Tsu! Very well written with only a few minor errors. Story wise it's wonderful! :D

[tsugrad]

Thank you! I never manage to write anything without a few errors in it, I blame the fact that I am easily distracted when writing and end up making mistakes. xD

[redyellowgirl]

I get wayyy distracted when writing as well. I have to completely disconnect from the interent to get anything done.

[ivillious_liliuvos]

Augh, too cute! I think a pile of cute goop is forming from the excess adorability. It's nauseating to look at.

Actually wait I'm just a tad bit pessimistic so I'm probably making this greater than it should seem. I want to just cuddle them all and comfort them! Eeek.

I have a feeling this could be better if you planned a bit more, no? I don't do any physical planning, but I do plan for at least fifteen minutes in my mind!

[tsugrad]

Yeah. I'm EXTREMELY guilty of not planning. I'm actually kinda thinking out the second chapter more than this one (This was totally just what my mind came up with as I went along) so maybe it will be closer to my normal writings (I totally haven't gotten yelled at many times for writing in class, nope, never) and less.... Un-plan-ned-ness.

[ivillious_liliuvos]

>w< I get yelled at almost the whole day, really. Even my family yells at me. You remind me of myself when I didn't plan at all. Now I do plan by drawing quick doodles of what I want to happen. They don't really make sense but if they did, I would've posted them up already. I tend to deviate from the plot once I write the parts down because they either don't fit that well or the new section is more interesting.

What I'm saying is basically draw stick figures talking. And I just gave you writing tips. MY writing style, really. -u-

[tsugrad]

I actually tried planning chapter 2 (And ended up scrapping it because I didn't like it and will rewrite it later) and ended with a paper full of messy scribbles that could be called my handwriting and random drawings all over it. So basically what happens when I take notes. I should try that though, I usually end up drawing all over my papers anyway.

[yaoi15]

Good good! I like it! Haha I said the same thing about the cut when I first posted. One question, I'm still confused about why they're mad at Vechs and hurting people?

[tsugrad]

I knew I missed something!
They're mad at Vechs because of his difficult maps. And the fact that he may or may not have asked them why they were having so much trouble ("It's EASY" they say....) and I guess they've finally had it with his maps (Although they story might change slightly later on because of my lack of ability to write short stories or have solid decisions... xD) and basically when Etho stepped in it turned in to a war of sorts. (I'm now realizing just how weak that story is... I'll have to find something else to go along with it). Anyway, I'm working on the second chapter right now.

[yaoi15]

Ah, ok! Tanku!