Date: Tuesday, August 9th, 2016 09:00 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] yamina_chan
I hate to ask this, becasue it means you have to reveal some of your plot thougths that aren't in a posted chapter yet, but I have to so I know if I can continue reading this or not from this chapter onward:
I was starting to see similarities to LOST and now the characters brought it up as well... is that going to continue to be a theme? If so I'll have to stop here, because I've not finished watching that series and I try to avoid spoilers where I can.

Now, the feedback part.
Good: Everyone has their own thoughts about how the situation should be handled; everyone is reacting to the circumstances diffrently and not everyone is calm. It's a scary situation and people are allowed to be on the edge.

Bad: Similar to the first chapter, things are progressing to fast without painting a scene so it's hard for the reader to be drawn into the events or care.
Equally, the way the debate was handled made all the characters seem a lot...younger. A lot less adult. Some more so then others, but all had it to a degree.
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