Writer's Block

[nekofan]

So, I was generously given a plot bunny to work and play with by pink_sheep (and I thank you so very much~) and I began to write... and then the infamous 'Writer's Block' hits me...

Though I do have two drafts for a beginning and would like to hear some feedback or get criticisms on them, if you don't mind that is!

I uploaded them to dA so that I can take them down when I'm done with the final product so... yeah... Here's the drafts!

Thank you, in passing, for reading just this! ^.^

Comments

[pink_sheep]

I'm liking the second one xD him being on Kurt's mind ~<3 so damn cute..
Plus you could work on how he ended up loosing the 1v1v1 fight because of it xD

D'aww I can't wait now xD
If you need someone to look it over after I'm free :3
And your welcome!

[nekofan]

Ooo~ That's good! I can mix the two together and fit in a kinda flashback a little later on Kurt's failure! :D

[pink_sheep]

Good idea :3
I tried flashbacks before I think they worked pretty well.. I think

[isi]

Wait, this may be a weird detail to latch on to, but what are the symptoms you're going for, compared to what happened in game? In reality, we know Zisteau just left his computer, but that manifests in game with his avatar being completely catatonic, and you seem to be going for something similar with the his becoming ostensibly mute. But muteness and/or catatonia are more indicative of psychological illness than physical illness, but that doesn't really seem applicable here, and it certainly wouldn't be contagious.

[nekofan]

Well, on the reddit, he said to someone saying he was feeling sick so that would be the symtoms (just hyped up a little that other people could catch somehow...) but he would be quiet in that way that some people usually are when they are feeling ill rather than completely silent.

[isi]

Didn't he say it was probably something he ate? If that's the case it wouldn't make sense for everyone else to catch it, unless they all ate the same thing or there was some kind of contamination in the arena chests that got on everyone's food or something. Though if you just want to go for the flu or something, that would make the most sense. I just got disproportionately distracted with why Zisteau wasn't even attempting to talk with no clear indication of what the illness was or what exactly it did.

[nekofan]

Yeah, he said it MAY have been something he'd eaten so he wasn't sure but that can be passed off as the flu, which I remembered as being 'passed around' a while ago.
I was gonna stay away from the food idea, but the fact that they were all probably eating from Bdubs' beef supply at the Arena makes much more sense... *brainspark*

[isi]

Heh, glad to have sparked something? I bet it was the proximity to all those zombies. Cross contamination is bound to happen if you're not careful. And maybe Zisteau was the only one affected right away because he's part zombie himself and that's where the disease thrives best. Wow, that college course I took about infectious diseases and how they spread really is paying off!

[nekofan]

YEAH! OMG! You is genius! But then I guess that Kurt isn't feeling sick because he was cautious and ate his own food but may get sick later on because he didn't eat as much as others... Oooo~! IDEAS! IDEAS! IDEAS!!