Great first chapter! Gives enough of your established world to let people know the score, but still leaves room for the mention of specific events as they become relevant. Also does a good job of establishing Guude's character, and setting the tone for the entire story. That is, if you plan on it being this action-packed through the entire thing.
Regardless, very promising start! Looking forward to more!
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Regardless, very promising start! Looking forward to more!